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5 dialogue descriptors from Twilight by Stephenie Meyer. 1. "I can do this." I sniffled. Pg. 243 2. "Bella," he said in a suspiciously soothing voice. Pg. 410 3. “You’re kidding!” He laughed. Pg. 483 4. “Get inside, Bella. We have to hurry.” His voice was urgent. Pg. 391 5. “I hope you haven’t been showing off-it’s rude.” She said with a sigh. Pg. 325 I was at Spanish class and my teacher was handing back our 500-word essay. She gave me mine with a smile and said warmly “You are a true learner when it comes to different languages.” “Thank you, Mrs. Estrada.” I said, loud enough for everyone to here me. Lizzie rolled her eyes. I smiled. I loved it when I outshone perfect Lizzie Smithson. She was soooo bossy. I heard her whisper something like ‘show off’ to her friend Pearl. Pearl Holly is just one of those pretty popular brats, I think you know the type. I wondered what she had scored. “Hey, Pearl, Lizzie, What did you get on the test?” I said snidely. Lizzie looked at me with disgust. “Actually, I got an A-!” She said proudly, smiling her perfect smile. My jaw dropped. I couldn’t help it. That was only one grade behind me! “Betcha you cheated!” I said angrily. “You could never do that well!” I said a bit too loud. Everybody turned to face me. I blushed bright red and said in a small voice “Well, I do think that,” Mrs. Estrada turned to me. She looked furious. “I have never been more disappointed in you, Ms. Johnson!” Mrs. Estrada said, her voice trembling with anger. I gulped. “You have never been this rude to anyone. Well, not that I know of. Ms. Holly, has Ms. Johnson ever done anything to you that made you feel bad?” She said, turning to Pearl with concern. Pearl put on her pouty face screwed up her eyes. “Well, actually, she made me feel bad by saying that my new shoes are…are…ugly.” She whined. And with that, she dove her face into Lizzie’s arms and sobbed. I had said nothing of the sort! “But…But…” I stuttered. I couldn’t believe what was happening. “No buts!” Mrs. Estrada said harshly. “Principals office! Now!” I tried my best not to cry as I walked down to the office. The secretary looked at me from behind her big computer monitor and said dully, “Copies again?” Of course she wouldn’t expect me to be visiting the principal! I was never in trouble! “Um, no. It’s about this.” I mumbled, handing her the note with my teachers messy scrawl stating that needed to visit the principal. I looked down at my feet while she read it. She looked at me with concerned surprise. “Are you sure this is for you?” I gulped and slowly nodded my head. She sent me to the principal. He took one look at me and sighed. “I knew you would eventually visit me.” Worst Day Ever! Article posted December 10, 2008 at 05:04 PM • comment (2) • Reads 1186 • Return to Blog List Add a CommentPosted Comments  Congratulations! You have won. This is the best blog Ihave saw. I love your work of fiction. You should try to write more fiction.
Comment Posted on February 25, 2009 at 09:17 AM by
20 Giant FanHedwig! This is a great work of FICTION! (And it better stay fiction-except fo the making copies part--ahem, thanks!) The detail and voice! It's a great example of telling a reader exactly how you want them to "hear" you! Prof. McG
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