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This is my concluding paragraph, and I feel it is my weakest, I would definitely like feedback.


As you can see,veterans definitely need to be remembered. They get injured for us. They die for us. They fight for us. They put the “United” in U.S.A. So, I ask you this one thing: please, please, always remember!
Article posted October 30, 2011 at 08:46 PM • comment (2) • Reads 67 • Return to Blog List
 
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Thanks Morgan, I did fix that actually, so it's all good.
Posted December 8, 2011 at 06:51 PM by • TaylorL
Posted December 8, 2011 at 06:51 PM by • TaylorL
This is late but it's still feed back: I think that all the sentences shouldn't start with they. The sentence that talks about being united, I really like that.
Posted November 25, 2011 at 10:35 PM by • Morgan
Posted November 25, 2011 at 10:35 PM by • Morgan
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