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Always Remember
This is my concluding paragraph, and I feel it is my weakest, I would definitely like feedback.
As you can see,veterans definitely need to be remembered. They get injured for us. They die for us. They fight for us. They put the “United” in U.S.A. So, I ask you this one thing: please, please, always remember!
Article posted October 30, 2011 at 08:46 PM •
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Thanks Morgan, I did fix that actually, so it's all good.
Comment Posted on December 8, 2011 at 06:51 PM by
TaylorL


This is late but it's still feed back: I think that all the sentences shouldn't start with they. The sentence that talks about being united, I really like that.
Comment Posted on November 25, 2011 at 10:35 PM by
Morgan

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My name is Alec. I always build stuff, from rockets to various treehouses to just about anything else. I'm working on my latest project now: an advanced treehouse that can support the weight of several people.
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