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the vacation
My story is that is the trip to California it was fun we went to Las Angeles, Las Vaguest, Grand Canyon, Yosemite national park, and San Francisco. We saw hover dam it was big and I think it was built in the Great Depression so also very old but it is huge it powers most of Las Angeles. I also saw the Grand Canyon and was deep I seen the golden gate bridge and the bridge was long. I have a lot of stuff I have seen on one trip.
Article posted September 9, 2011 at 09:10 AM •
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I really like your topic, but I think you should have added a little more detail and fixed some grammatical errors. But I really liked it!
Comment Posted on September 16, 2011 at 09:23 AM by
LH7


I have never went to all of the places you have went. here are some tips, work on your grammar, puncuation, caapatalization, and make your sentences more fluent.
Comment Posted on September 13, 2011 at 12:39 PM by
CL 7th

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