Persuasive paragraph
Some websites are not appropriate. Websites have viruses and errors that would make our computer as slow as a turtle dawdling across the ocean floor. Kids can’t go into violent images and inappropriate websites like facebook, twitter and youtube without teacher supervision ensuring that what they see is safe and appropriate. Do you want your children going on violent websites seeing rude images and accidentally putting a virus on the school computer system?
Good things: 1. I can explain my point of view using a title.2.I can use emotive words. Improvements: 1. I can back up my opinion with good detail and evidence. 2. Sentence stating my reason.
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